Years ago in the outskirts of Chicago, there lived a young woman
about 17 years of age who was left to fend for herself. This young woman,
Katie, went to school everyday and was oftentimes mocked by those around her
for her ratty clothes and her scuffed up shoes. Whenever school was over,
she would walk back to the dumps and took care of the cats that she lived by.
The tabby cats were particularly fond of her and she commonly would feed
them any scraps she could find while also entertaining them with little wads of
paper she'd throw for them to run after. Sometimes, a kind stranger would
give her a meal but usually, she was on her own. One day, her school was
hosting its annual prom. Although she couldn't afford a dress, she always
dreamed about going to her senior prom in a beautiful dress and falling in love
with a boy. The tabby cats knew about this dream since the girl told them
about it often and were determined to give her the night of her life. On
the afternoon of the dance, the tabby cats appeared with a beautiful dress,
jewelry, shoes, and earrings, as well as a ticket to the dance. Katie was
so excited she could hardly wait, but the tabby cats told her, "If you go,
make sure you don't forget about us. We were your first friends and have
considered you one of our own." Katie promised to never forget them and
was shocked that they were even concerned about this possibility. She
went to the dance, realized she didn't know how to dance, and came back to hang
out with the tabby cats as if nothing had ever happened. Katie had
experienced her high school prom and realized it wasn't everything it was made
out to be. Thus, she returned back and was thankful for what she had even
though it wasn't very much to begin with.
A pair of tabby cats
Source: Wikipedia
Author's Note: My story is based off
of The
Girl and the Turkeys from a
book written in 1929 by Stith Thompson called Tales of the North American
Indians from the Native
American Marriage Tales unit. In the
original story, the girl had turkeys who she cared for and she went to a
festival/dance that was customary for the people instead. At the end, she doesn’t get back to the
turkeys at a decent hour so they give up on her and leave. I didn’t like that so I changed the ending
and made it more modern.
I really liked this modern spin on a Cinderella themed story! I especially like how the girl returned to her friends. She never forgot who her true friends are. I think that is the key to happiness/success, finding your true friends who are always there for you! Great job on this story, the modernization made it so much more relatable to others.
ReplyDeleteI like the pace you take with the story, especially the way you structure your sentences! However, it's just good practice to have paragraph breaks/indents to make sure that a typical reader doesn't get lost in the sea of ideas that you're trying to explain to them. Also, I'm slightly curious as to why you decided to make the story more modern (?), cause you didn't fully explain that in your Author's note.
ReplyDeleteI liked your way of twisting Cinderella and this story into one coherent tale! There were a few grammar errors (mainly just wording) but everyone makes those mistakes every now and then, so no big deal! I never really had a prom at my high school, so I personally can't relate to the story, but the way you've set it up makes it relatable to someone that did! Good job overall!
ReplyDelete